In this excerpt from my time-travel short story, Mason gets some advice from a famous painter.Mason spent the night under Botticelli’s roof, along with the apprentices and under-artists who lived there. He lay awake through the few hours left before dawn, casting about between the wonder of where and when he was, and the heart-bursting… Continue reading Tuesday Critique: Botticelli’s Story
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Tuesday Critique: Alessa’s promise
In this excerpt from my work in progress, a time travel story set in Renaissance Florence, Alessa has just met Mason, and has seen a portrait of herself that has yet to be painted.Alessa couldn’t feel as sorry as she ought. Oh, Matteo was trying as hard as possible to make her feel sorry, appealing to… Continue reading Tuesday Critique: Alessa’s promise
Tuesday Critique: Mason Meets a Master
In this latest excerpt from my Renaissance time travel story, the hero meets a hero of his own, the artist Botticelli. Please feel free to share any feedback, as honest as possible. :)Mason recognized Sandro Botticelli easily from his self portrait, picking him out from his apprentices at once. A man of around forty, with… Continue reading Tuesday Critique: Mason Meets a Master
Tuesday Critique: In the Garden of San Marco
Here's a new excerpt from my time travel story set in Renaissance Florence. Hope you like it! 🙂 Please feel free to comment and critique. Mason stepped into the garden, feeling as though he’d just entered Eden. Birdsong and the trickle of fountains mixed with the sough of the wind through a million leaves. The… Continue reading Tuesday Critique: In the Garden of San Marco
Tuesday Critique: The Painting
Here's something I just hammered out for a potential story. I'm planning on making it a time travel. Please let me know what you think! :)Love at first sight always seemed a ridiculous concept to Mason Caro—till it happened to him.Well, maybe it was still rather ridiculous, he amended, tilting his head to examine the… Continue reading Tuesday Critique: The Painting
Tuesday Critique: Sensible Advice
Here's a first look at an upcoming short story entitled "Sensible Advice". Let me know what you think! :)The best advice is no advice, Jane thought privately to herself as the conversation raged on around her, now self-propelled. She never ceased to marvel at the way they could start by asking her a simple question… Continue reading Tuesday Critique: Sensible Advice
Tuesday Critique: Being Brave
Here's another excerpt from my Nanowrimo 2013 novel, Enter. In this piece, Eliora and Ethan discuss being brave. As always, please feel free to share your honest thoughts on it! 🙂 “Do you have any idea how fascinating you are to me?” I blink. Now it’s my turn to blush. “I mean, I have… Continue reading Tuesday Critique: Being Brave
Tuesday Critique: Astra and her Mother-in-Law
We've all heard of the overbearing mother-in-law. Imagine if you were a queen and your mother-in-law was queen before you. This is my picture of how it would go, taken from my Nanowrimo 2013 novel, Enter. As always, please feel free to let me know what you think. Atossa did not wait until Astra’s visit,… Continue reading Tuesday Critique: Astra and her Mother-in-Law
Tuesday Critique: Eliora Arrives at the Harem
In this second excerpt from my Nanowrimo novel, Enter, the main character Eliora arrives in the harem of King Xerxes in Susa. Please feel free to let me know what you think. 🙂 The first glimpse of a future home is always fraught with meaning. Which room would be mine? What would become my new… Continue reading Tuesday Critique: Eliora Arrives at the Harem
Tuesday Critique: Enter
This is a little peek at my Nanowrimo novel, entitled Enter. Hope you enjoy. Feel free to let me know what you think in the comments. 🙂 When the sun rises on my night’s vigil, I know I am not alone. It doesn’t matter that Ethan is sleeping in his rumpled bed across the tiny,… Continue reading Tuesday Critique: Enter
Erin E. M. Hatton 